Congrats! That was a fabulous drabble. I liked the scenario as well as all the characters.
I must say there are a few phrases that sounded a little off to me. "He simply needed some air." Actually, this one isn't off, I just think Lily could have been more witty or rude. “I doubt that." This one does feel off after "You don't defy us." Could be just me.
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Date: 2010-10-01 02:59 pm (UTC)I must say there are a few phrases that sounded a little off to me. "He simply needed some air." Actually, this one isn't off, I just think Lily could have been more witty or rude. “I doubt that." This one does feel off after "You don't defy us." Could be just me.
All in all, a good drabble.