Drabble: Don't Move

[dexstarr]

Title: Don't Move
Author: dexstarr
Word Count: 499
Rating: NC-17
Challenge: hp_humpdrabbles "Teeth" by Lady Gaga.
Characters: Bellatrix Lestrange, Barty Crouch Jr.
Warnings: Oral Sex
Author's Note: First time writing this pairing.
Disclaimer: HP and all assorted belong to JKR, and are not mine.

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“If your hands move one more time, you won’t like what happens.”

In response, he clenched his fingers even more tightly together, until his fingernails dug painfully into the backs of his hands. He’d barely slipped, hadn’t even moved his hands from behind his back, but she’d known, and he didn’t want to risk finding out what she meant.

Bellatrix said it would teach him control.

Barty found that rather ironic considering who had said it. New as he was to the Dark Lord’s ranks, he knew she was, well – mentally unstable was putting it lightly. Not to mention she was one of Lord Voldemort’s favorites; he found it hard to believe she’d willingly sink to her knees to “help” him.

But she had, and here he was, pants down around his ankles and hands behind his back, trying his hardest not to move while Bellatrix Lestrange sucked on his cock like it was a lolly.

She had a damn good mouth, and he longed to lace his fingers in her black hair, to press her blood-red lips closer to his groin, to stuff his cock down her throat.

“Oh Barty, aren’t you a bad boy,” she purred, pulling back from him just enough so that her hot breath tickled the head of his dick, and he shivered, both from fear and arousal. She could read his mind? What sort of skills did this witch have?

“Plenty, and I’m sure you’ve never heard of most of them.” She punctuated each word with a swirl of her tongue on him, and Barty groaned from the airy sensations. He thrust his hips forward, toward her open mouth, and Bellatrix laughed. “Oh no, this isn’t about this,” she said, harshly squeezing the base of his cock. “It’s about control, which you sorely lack.”

When she brought one sharp, pointy nail up to stroke his scrotum, he whimpered; Barty had heard plenty of stories about what she did with those nails. “I can see you’re going to need many lessons,” she said, and Barty winced. She planned to do this again? He wasn’t so sure he liked that idea.

“As many times as it takes for you to control your body…” she traced her nails about the soft skin of his sack. “Your reactions…” her nails tickled; he shifted from foot to foot. “Your voice…” One spiky nail pressed down painfully; he barely swallowed a yelp.

Just what the hell was he doing here?

Then her mouth engulfed him again, tongue working the underside of his cock while she inhaled him, and all sense fled his brain. The only thing he could think was more, as Bellatrix licked and teased him, her wet lips moving up and down his length; he was so hard it hurt. Unconsciously he pumped his hips again, trying to encourage her to do more.

Stupid boy, he heard in his head, and then she bit him, sharp teeth sinking in deeply. I told you not to move.


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Comments

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

I hadn't listened to it before the challenge, but it grew on me. I think my favorite of hers is...Bad Romance maybe. I don't know for sure.

This pairing is definitely growing on me, lets me get my femdom out, rawr!

And thanks, happy you liked hon :)

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Actually I think Barty would tend toward submissive. I don't think he's that dominant, but that's just my opinion. I mean he's young, impressionable...

Maybe not though. It could be a challenge to write that fight for dominance between them, hrmmmmmm.

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

I don't know, but now I'm going to have to try both ways, damn you! :p

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Actually hell the more I think about it, this could go all sorts of ways. My crazy brain is envisioning a mini series between the two, all on control, and maybe reusing the first line...

[reg-flint.livejournal.com]

I don't like most smut, but I do like well written smut with a bit (no pun intended) of kink. Good work.

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Thanks! :)

Here's the weirdest thing, considering I've been writing a ton of smut lately (and have more in the pipeline) - I consider it more of a challenge than writing gen fic, because I don't necessarily care for sex much. But I like kink a lot, and kink's usually associated with sex. TMI maybe, but I find it somewhat ironic for myself.

I need to figure out somewhat to write kink and control dynamics that isn't smutty...hmm.

[opaljade.livejournal.com]

Great take on the prompt. This was perfect! I adored Bellatrix's portrayal--intense, sensual, a tad insane but sharp as a whip at the same time!

Your writing is unforced and flows nicely. This exchange between them really made me LOL! : She could read his mind? What sort of skills did this witch have?

“Plenty, and I’m sure you’ve never heard of most of them.” She punctuated each word with a swirl of her tongue on him, and Barty groaned from the airy sensations.

Very well done, dexstarr! :D

(I'm going to have to find darker icons for your page! LOL!)

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Thank you muchly, OJ!

I freaking love writing Bellatrix, in case you can't tell, hehe. Mainly for all the reasons you mentioned, and it's just so damn fun. I think I have an inner Bella :D

LOL at darker icons. My current default is a nice, bright green!

[damianjblack.livejournal.com]

This is hot! :)

OUCH at the biting! Boy really does need control, huh? ;)

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Naturally biting was the first thing I thought of with "teeth." I'm mean!

Thanks, glad you thought it was hot. :D

[damianjblack.livejournal.com]

Bella's certainly mean ;) LOL!

[thaneofcawdor.livejournal.com]

I'd say something coherent but I just can't do it right now.

You write this pairing impeccably. He's so green and she's such a dangerous bitch. I want an obedient Barty in my life right now because if he's anything like yours, he's divine.

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Oh thank you! I was curious to see what you would have to say about it, considering I love how you write the two! Glad to see I have rendered you incoherent.

And my Barty is kinda green, I think he needs more training! But I'm sure you're more than up for it.

[thaneofcawdor.livejournal.com]

Oh wow, really? That's so sweet. Well, I definitely love your version of this most delicious of pairings.

Oh yes, I'll, ahem, take charge of dear Mr Crouch. *shifty eyes* I also Friended you because your fics are wonderful and make me ecstatic. If it's not all right just poke me with a small dagger or something.

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I plan to write them more, I really had fun with this. I kind if want to see what would happen if Barty tried to get control over Bellatrix...

Have fun with Barty and just send him back when you've knocked some more sense and obedience into him!

I shall add you as a friend when I get home, on my phone now and lj mobile isnt the greatest. And thanks for adding me :) hopefully I can keep up to the level of incohereny I have so far!

[thaneofcawdor.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you are! "I kind if want to see what would happen if Barty tried to get control over Bellatrix..." - sexiest. Concept. Ever. I might explode a little bit if you do it. With those two, it's bound to be a mouth-watering piece of smut. I love the idea of dominant-Barty suddenly getting sinister and turning the tables.

Merci beaucoup for Friending me back, in turn I hope you continue to enjoy my porny dabblings!

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Oh I do greatly enjoying your drabbles, as they are what got me to write this pairing! :D

Re sexiest concept ever, yes, it's definitely growing on me. As soon as I left that comment earlier I knew it was inevitable. I just have to do some thinking to see how it would come about. that will be the tricky part...

[kellychambliss.livejournal.com]

Great pairing; they're just right for each other. At this point, they're both teetering on that knife-edge between instability and insanity, and you perfectly show us the twists in both of them. Dangerous and hot.

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Oh my, thank you very much! That's kind of why I'm on the smut bandwagon these days, because I like to write power and control, and smut is the easiest way to explore it.

[melusinahp.livejournal.com]

!!!

Gorgeous. I love your Bella. ♥

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm very fond of her too :D

[exartemarte.livejournal.com]

Ouch!!!

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Yep, both Bellatrix and I are quite mean!

[lokifan]

OMG AWESOME!

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[xsilverxlightx.livejournal.com]

Yay Barty/Bella! This is awesome and very similar to how I picture their relationship. I really want to write more with this pairing now but sadly have several other things that have to be dealt with first.

I was just browsing through a few of your fics and all of them are really amazing. I don't have nearly enough dark/death eater fics showing up in my friends list so I friended you. Hope that's okay. :)

[dexstarr.livejournal.com]

Yup, as I said on your journal, I love this pairing. If you're looking for some more good Barty/Bella stories, check out thaneofcawdor. She's pretty responsible for getting me so into the two!

Thanks for adding me - I added you back :) I do tend to write mostly dark stuff featuring my favorite Death Eaters, so hopefully I'll darken your friends list some :) Once in a while some fluff sneaks through, but not too often!

And glad you enjoyed my fics! Thank you for reading.